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if you don't like it here, why not just get up and leave
there's a world out there that you wouldn't believe

dragons and wagons and flagons of ale
ships bigger than cities and oceans to sail

but there's thugs and there's bullies, cutpurses and thieves
so young to be walking around so naive

because something is taken for everything gained
leaving the end of the day disappointed and drained

so why you ask do you keep coming back
for a bite and a nibble of this wonderful snack

well the real world is good every now and again
but after a while everything just looks so plain

so wrap up your blankets and hide under bed
start dreaming in daytime and forge on ahead

maybe one day you'll live to be wiser than me
but you've got years left of dreaming until then to see
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ReleveeMySweet Featured By Owner Dec 22, 2010  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
This is a very interesting poem. Quite well writen. :3
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Khiri-543 Featured By Owner Feb 2, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you~
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ReleveeMySweet Featured By Owner Feb 2, 2011  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
You're welcome. x3
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Daft-Enigma Featured By Owner Dec 22, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
Are you, out of curiosity, talking about reading?

Very nicely written by the way I love it.
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Khiri-543 Featured By Owner Feb 2, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
*nods* +10 points. ^^

Thankyou~
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Daft-Enigma Featured By Owner Feb 2, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
You're welcome (:
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NightWitch55 Featured By Owner Dec 20, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
It's rhymey and nice. I like the way you wrote it. My favorite part is "dragons and wagons and flagons of ale
ships bigger than cities and oceans to sail" Very nice.
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LilaJanet Featured By Owner Dec 20, 2010
Me too. :)
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AnnamaeTezuka Featured By Owner Dec 19, 2010  Hobbyist General Artist
I like it :) The rhyming was nice too :)
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Khiri-543 Featured By Owner Feb 2, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks~ ^^
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